Hi! EOP paper. I prepared an ode for you. I hope you to enjoy this poem.
When I saw you first,
I wanted to avoid you.
I couldn't speak anymore.
When I saw you second,
I wanted to escape you.
I couldn't breathe anymore.
Paper is thin,
PA's voice is low,
Just these things make me surprised.
You make me sad
You make me shocked
Friends laugh,
PAs smile,
just these things make me disappointed.
You make me hard
You make me sigh
Bye! I ♥ EOP(?)
Yooungsan,
ReplyDeleteThis ode is too short. To add to it, you should use personifications. Give the EOP paper human qualities. You did a good job describing how the EOP paper makes you feel.
Hi!
ReplyDeleteThis is a good ode, but it is a little bit short. Try to use more descriptive language in your ode. Keep working hard~
-Yongwook, Oh (Writing TA)
It is a fun and enjoyable ode. But I think it was too short. Your ideas about it was very new. I liked it. ^^
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